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Letter From
The Goldfields
Task:
You are a miner who has traveled to an Australian goldfield.
Write a letter to your family at home recounting your journey to
the goldfields and what life has been like for you since you
arrived. Think carefully about what you have seen and the
hardships you have faced and don't forget to include all
necessary punctuation and paragraphs.
137
Tent, Brown Street,
Bathurst,
New South
Wales.
2nd of
November 1878,
Dear Mother
and Father,
How are you?
Are you well? And how are pops and grandma, are they well
and how about James and Mia?
Now I
will tell you about my journey to Bathurst .The journey was
very bad , we did not have a lot of food and water because a
person named John ate all the food and drank all the water .So
then we had to stop off again to get more food and water witch
was very boring because it took two hours of waiting.
Then we
continued walking to Bathurst. It was hard but we got there after
a long and annoying walk for two whole weeks.
As
soon as I got there, I had to mark my area with four stakes so
no one could get the area that I wanted to dig in. I
then had to send a letter to the government to get my license
for thirty shillings .Then I met a person ,his name is Charlie
I met him on the way to Bathurst.
So we
decided to work together as a team to find gold but if we find
gold we have to half the money. We also agreed to buy some alcohol from a
sly grog seller. He is known as a sly grog seller because
alcohol is banned at the gold fields. Then we saw some Chinese
so me and Charlie started to argue with them. We do not like the
way they ate and got dressed .
Then
after that I went to bed after a long day and I did not
have mutton because we ate the mutton last night while Charlie
was still digging because he really wants to find gold so he
can get rich and live like kings.
The next day
I started to dig again and I saw a miner that was an Aboriginal
but I
did not bother him because I really wanted to find gold. If I
find gold I will be able to help
you pay your rent so that you wont get kicked out of your
beautiful home.
I
will try to write to you more often but it has been very
difficult this past year as you would know.
Love
Robbie.
Robbie B
Bibliography
Gard,S.[1998]The
gold seekers. Macmillan Education,South Yarra.
McClish,B.[1968]Gold
in Australia. Macmillan Education, South Melbourne.
Nicholson,J[1994]Gold.Allen and Unwin St Leonards.
Webber,K.[2001].Gold fever .Macmillan Education ,South Yarra.
Webber,K [2001].Daily Life On The Gold Fields.
Macmillan Education ,South Yarra.
www.sovereignhill.com.au
| Learning
Process & Self Evaluation: |
| Steps I went
through to write this letter: |
- Learn about gold then find information.
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more on: |
Getting better at getting no mistakes. |
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effort for this task has been: |
Quality |
My
best work |
Could
do better |
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| Comment:
I learnt a lot about gold. |
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| Teacher
Evaluation: |
| Indicator |
Progressing
Towards |
Achieved |
Working
Beyond |
| Locating
Information |
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| Records information
from a variety of sources |
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| Information is
written in 'own words' |
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| Information is
detailed and at an appropriate stage level |
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| Recount/Letter
Structure |
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| Text is consistent
with what the student was asked to do |
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| Text is correctly
structured following standard letter conventions |
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| Text begins with an
orientation which introduces the topic to be written about |
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| Text recounts the
events in chronological order |
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| Text concludes with
an evaluation/interpretative statement on the impact of the events |
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| Text contains
technical or subject specific vocabulary |
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| Text is organised
into paragraphs to signal different stages of the recount |
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| Includes a correctly
set out bibliography |
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| Grammar |
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| Writes in
appropriate tense |
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| Sentences are
correctly structured and there is subject/verb agreement |
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| Writes simple and complex
sentences |
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| Uses a variety of
conjunctions and connectives |
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| Uses plurals and
articles (the, a, an etc.) correctly |
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| Uses correct
punctuation |
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| Spells needed words
correctly (has used Spell Check) |
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| Identifies and
corrects such things as spelling errors, incomplete sentences or
missing punctuation in own writing |
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| Presentation |
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| Uses accepted typing
conventions |
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| Uses a variety of
print and script styles for effect |
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| Includes appropriate graphics |
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| Effective, easy to
read layout |
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| Comment:
A good try Robbie. You have included aspects of life in the
goldfields but you need to go into more detail. Take care to
check for spelling and punctuation mistakes. |
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